Passing On

The blue skies open their wings,

Enveloping us with careful will,

Nudging us, as it prods us on,

Blowing drafts of wind,in its carefree sojourn,

The ground has shaken but bears the brunt,

For we are shaken when it takes affront.


Whether on cloud nine or ground zero,

We are rendered breathless by each turn,

Grounding ourselves is an important phase,

With a safe landing to resist the pace,

Ominously separating us from ourselves,

And then gathering dust to cloud our taste.


Life teaches Man to taste his success,

But then asks him to suffer in distaste,

A man would know well to prolong his efforts,

Enjoying the fodder with due process,

He climbs to the top, with little to digress,

Alas-there’s another at the helm,he fails to digest.


If failure and succcess are singly exclusive,

There is really no way, but cleaning the surface,

Wiping out boundaries can be painfully simple,

And creating new lines can desert our wishes,

Dealers of hope-beware of your fortune,

Keepers of destiny-parade your passion.


The stars are struck as new waves are made,

Emotions surge as new stakes are laid,

We live to die, ploughing our sinful way,

Are star-struck when our achievements are paid,

We pass on and away-they then realize,

Our rides were all futile and all is laid to rest.

Published in a literary and artistic journal: The River


33 responses

  1. PP

    Great poem, Vishwas. It captures the essence of life as well as the futility of it.

    December 12, 2011 at 10:31 am

  2. Your heart seems heavy.
    Beautiful words.

    December 12, 2011 at 12:27 pm

  3. Very spiritual poem. I feel the strenght of mankind in this.


    December 12, 2011 at 1:42 pm

  4. The last line really drives the message home. Very nice write!

    December 12, 2011 at 2:48 pm

    • Thanks charlesmashburn, glad you like it:)

      December 13, 2011 at 6:24 am

  5. nothing is mutually exclusive it seems…indeed!
    enjoy gooseberry day!

    December 12, 2011 at 3:31 pm

    • Thanks Life: Between the lines, glad you like it:)

      December 13, 2011 at 6:47 am

  6. smiles.
    lovely logic and arguments, beautifully done.

    December 12, 2011 at 4:24 pm

  7. authentic and refreshing, smiles.


    December 13, 2011 at 12:33 am

  8. very heartfelt

    December 14, 2011 at 5:04 pm

  9. Full of emotion and thought, well expressed, very well done!! Blessings, Terri

    December 19, 2011 at 1:35 pm

  10. Greetings:

    Hope all is well.

    Noting that you have won the perfect poet award for week 58,
    what an achievement, thanks for your unbeatable contribution to us
    along the way, keep up the excellence. Best!

    Come join our poetry rallyby Friday if you wish to mingle and get inspired!

    A poem of your choice or a free verse is accepted.

    Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.

    Looking forward to seeing you share.
    Respect and hugs.

    December 20, 2011 at 8:16 am

    • Thanks Poets Rally, honoured to have been awarded ‘perfect poet award’. Keen to participate again:)

      April 15, 2012 at 3:31 am

  11. Thought provoking and inspiring. Well done!
    Happy Holidays!

    December 20, 2011 at 1:25 pm

  12. ~L

    “Emotions surge as new stakes are laid, We live to die, ploughing our sinful way”

    My favorite lines! Really enjoyed this deep poem… wow.. really really enjoyed it!

    December 21, 2011 at 2:40 am

  13. Thoughtful words. Well done.

    Anna :o]

    December 22, 2011 at 10:19 am

  14. how are you?

    fabulous piece…smiles.
    Hope that you have had a great Merry Christmas.
    Happy New Year.
    Share a piece of your poetry today at our poetry party today, 1 to 3 random poems are welcome in general, old ones are okay.
    hope to see you in.
    Have fun!
    Sending you love and blessings.

    December 27, 2011 at 4:27 am

    • Thanks Jingle Poetry,glad you like it:) Will certainly participate again:)

      April 15, 2012 at 3:48 am

  15. powerful…

    it is great to see you share.


    January 6, 2012 at 3:52 am

  16. A reflection of spiritual life awareness.

    January 7, 2012 at 7:09 am

  17. Very powerful. Enjoyed reading it. Be blessed.

    January 12, 2012 at 7:37 am

  18. Thanks elizena, glad you like it:)

    April 15, 2012 at 4:13 am

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