Prime Connection
Perched at the bus stand my musings stood,
Halting its impulsive train on the mundane wood.
The trees sang in organic harmony with their heavy hood,
Dropping flowers of all colours like they ne’er would.
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My journey hasn’t started but I hummed along,
Communing with Nature travelling a furlong.
My bus misses my travels strumming a different song,
While it uses a frequency of a stronger prong.
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My heartbeat sounded from a melodious tine,
Following the tune of my mind’s whining pine.
A harmonious body and mind to suavely align,
With the forces of nature for a heady trine,
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Changes in tune have a marked impact,
As sounds in the rush and swirl sway to distract.
There is an association to time that’s vaguely abstract,
Stifling the connection we’re given to protract.
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The beauty of Nature is on an ethereal plane,
The mechanical works are in a rugged lane,
Sorting the two out decides our temporal vane,
With a measured tread to keep our vein.
Wow!
March 3, 2011 at 3:39 am
Thanks:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:09 am
do i like it? why, of course! its an exquisite literary handiwork! *claps* ^_^ nice one! thumbs up!
March 3, 2011 at 10:37 am
Thanks Julian,glad you like it:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:10 am
nice rhyme vishwas! the occasional waiting seems befitting to our awareness of nature.. my wk 39 is here.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2009/11/17/regret/
March 3, 2011 at 1:49 pm
Thanks fiveloaf,yes would agree with you:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:11 am
“Sorting the two out decides our temporal vane.”
What a fabulous line. There is a lot here, a poem to go over and absorb.
Beautiful.
March 3, 2011 at 4:26 pm
Thanks,glad you like it:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:12 am
love it…
very stunning and dreamy imagery.
March 3, 2011 at 5:19 pm
Thanks Jingle,glad you like it:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:12 am
Great Rally contribution, loved the image too …
March 4, 2011 at 6:39 pm
Thanks, glad you liked it:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:13 am
Excellent words!
March 4, 2011 at 8:14 pm
Thanks Paulo,glad you like it:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:13 am
Exquisite rhythm & rhyme! My favorite are the opening two lines.
March 5, 2011 at 1:43 am
Thanx,glad you like it:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:14 am
I like the monorhyme in each verse.. and that change verse the best
Happy Rally!
My Thursday Poets Rally 39 Entry
March 5, 2011 at 6:14 am
Happy rally! Glad you like it:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:15 am
nicely done
March 5, 2011 at 1:27 pm
Thanks Dishilicious,glad you like it:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:15 am
this was a rich read, great job!
March 5, 2011 at 4:03 pm
Thanks Thomas,glad you like it:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:16 am
Lovely. I smelt the country through the window of your bus. The beauty of a country road in the fall.
March 5, 2011 at 6:29 pm
Thanks, happy to have you in my world:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:18 am
welcome, thanks for sharing…
A++
have fun, support by visiting a dozen entries starting from the latest one, go backwards, 216, 215, 214, ….207..
your input is appreciated.
March 9, 2011 at 2:49 am
Thanks again Jingle,will do so:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:18 am
smiles. thank you for taking us on that journey with you…love your rhymes as usual…
March 9, 2011 at 3:35 am
Thanks Brian,glad you like it:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:19 am
Great poem. It flowed nicely and felt as if it could go anywhere. Love the ending to tie it all together.
March 9, 2011 at 4:23 am
Thanks mattsmithis, glad you like it:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:20 am
Beautiful imagery and the comparisions between the mind and machine are superbly worded. Loved the rhythm and enjoyed a smooth ride along with the rhymes.
March 9, 2011 at 4:29 am
Thanks, glad you like it.:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:23 am
…The beauty of Nature is on an ethereal plane,
The mechanical works are in a rugged lane,
Sorting the two out decides our temporal vane,
With a measured tread to keep our vein…
…true indeed.
March 9, 2011 at 5:00 am
Thanks dasuntoucha,glad you like it:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:23 am
Whooaa! You have a fantastic way with words, V!
And I sooo enjoy your rhymes…
And with this poem, you have really shown how inspiring Nature can be… singing to us, making us sing… isn’t she just lovely!?!?
March 9, 2011 at 9:52 am
Thanks Kavita,glad it made you sing:) Yes,Nature is really lovely:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:25 am
Its very difficult IMO to rhyme 4 lines consecutively, let alone in successive stanzas, and still make it sound interesting. I think you do a good job.
March 9, 2011 at 1:02 pm
Thanks dustus for your appreciation:)
March 10, 2011 at 2:26 am
as someone who loves rhyme i really enjoyed this ones flow…great share…pete
March 10, 2011 at 10:11 am
Thanks Pete, glad you enjoyed it:)
March 27, 2011 at 2:51 am
Fantastic…
March 11, 2011 at 12:50 pm
Thanks Dakshi, glad you like it:)
March 27, 2011 at 2:52 am
I loved the rhymes!
The imagery is fantastic.. the “nature inspired” adjective- wow!!
A very fine poem this one is..
Well written V!
Hugs xx
March 12, 2011 at 10:30 am
Thanks Olivia, happy that you enjoyed it:)
March 27, 2011 at 2:54 am
Lovely wording, great poem!
March 12, 2011 at 10:15 pm
Thanks Lisa,glad you liked it:)
March 27, 2011 at 2:55 am
My favorite lines, “The trees sang in organic harmony with their heavy hood,
Dropping flowers of all colours like they ne’er would.”
Beautifu!
March 13, 2011 at 4:34 pm
My favorite lines, “The trees sang in organic harmony with their heavy hood,
Dropping flowers of all colours like they ne’er would.”
Beautiful!
March 13, 2011 at 4:34 pm
Thanks, glad you like it:)
March 27, 2011 at 2:57 am
Vishwas, stunning images and your rhyming–both end rhymes and internal–flow effortlessly.
March 13, 2011 at 5:09 pm
Thanks,happy that you enjoyed the imagery:)
March 27, 2011 at 2:57 am
Greetings!
Thanks for the lovely contribution to potluck on week 25,
week 26 is open NOW, we treasury your poetry
And hope to see you in shortly…old poems are welcome!
xoxox
March 14, 2011 at 1:42 am
Thanks Jingle,I’ve joined week 26:)
March 27, 2011 at 2:59 am
I liked that! An unusual theme but you worked it well. I like the contrast of Nature and the bus.
http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2011/03/14/bubble-bath/
March 14, 2011 at 4:32 pm
Thanks Jessica, happy that you liked the contrast:)
March 27, 2011 at 3:02 am
A poem with a smooth flow.Nice!
March 15, 2011 at 2:43 pm
Thanks Uma, glad you like it:)
March 27, 2011 at 3:02 am
Thats a perfect one with a good sense of imagination and studded with creativity….lovely
March 16, 2011 at 1:56 pm
Thanks Manu,glad you enjoyed it:)
March 27, 2011 at 3:03 am
Not a big fan of structured rhyming work, but solid, enjoyable.
March 18, 2011 at 12:20 am
Thanks Steve, glad you like it:)
March 27, 2011 at 3:03 am
wonderful web of words that rhyme!
August 9, 2012 at 10:11 am
Beautifully contemplative, almost hypnotic. I love the idea of experiencing nature while waiting for a bus, and you extend that them in a wonderfully wound muse on that situation.
August 12, 2012 at 2:56 am